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Title: When the Bough Breaks 3/3
Characters: Jack/Ianto (with Owen, Gwen and Tosh)
Rating: PG-13
Words: 2775 (this part)
Spoilers: Torchwood Season 1 and Doctor Who Season 3 (specifically "End of Days" and "Utopia", "Sound of Drums" and "Last of the Time Lords")
Notes: Fabulous beta done by [info]kensieg. Much information - both medical and geographical - garnered from Google, so take with a large grain of salt, yeah?
Summary:  What if The Year That Never Was never was, but the wild goose hunt in the Himalayas was.  And what if Jack were to come home to find that there's a much bigger issue to deal with than the fact that he left?

When the Bough Breaks Part 1 | Part 2 | Part 3


The next day the doctor signed Ianto out to Owen just after breakfast so they would have the morning to make the trip back to Cardiff. Owen loaded him up on anti-nausea medicine and a mild tranquilizer to make the trip easier and he and Jack manhandled him into the passenger seat of the SUV. Owen tucked a couple of lousy, flat hospital pillows between Ianto’s head and the window glass as Jack buckled him in.

As Owen climbed into the back seat he warned Jack not to make any sharp turns because Ianto was so far out of it he’d just fall right over. Jack drove almost all the way back to Cardiff with one hand on Ianto’s arm steadying him from the dips and turns of the motorway. At least that was the official excuse.

As they pulled into the SUV’s parking spot Owen said he’d go and grab the wheelchair from the autopsy bay. He’d already told Jack he was going to start renovating to serve as a more proper infirmary. The ratio of live patients to dead ones had been rapidly evening out lately and he’d found himself frighteningly under-prepared for the ones not ready for a drawer in the fourth level basement.

“I can walk,” Ianto slurred from the front seat.

“You can’t even talk,” Jack opined.

“I need to walk. William said I need to walk around every few hours during the day or I’ll just end up all jellied again.” Ianto forced his eyes open to help strengthen his case.

Jack reached over and ruffled the dark fuzz that was just starting to cover the scars from the surgery. “First time I’ve ever heard you agree with your physio. Alright, I’ll come around and help you.”

Ianto didn’t deny that he needed the help. He let Jack open the door and unlatch his seatbelt before he determinedly swung his feet out and pushed himself out of the seat.

He would have gone straight to the ground if Jack hadn’t been there to catch him. “Okay, easy,” Jack whispered as he got his arm around Ianto’s shoulder and waited for him to find his legs. “Nice and slow. No hurry.”

Ianto nodded then realized that was a mistake. He still got dizzy if he moved his head too fast.

It took a while, but Jack got Ianto up to reception and through the back door and into the lift. Ianto didn’t stumble until they were trying to clear the cog door and Ianto misjudged the ledge.

“I gotcha, I gotcha,” Jack said as he pulled Ianto back in. “You dizzy?” Ianto had broken into a cold sweat and started shaking. This was further than any of the walks he’d taken in hospital, and Jack was afraid they may have pushed just a little too far.

“Just… just a little,” Ianto admitted.

“Let’s sit you over here for a few minutes then we’ll get you downstairs after you’ve rested a bit.” Jack led him to the couch on the main level of the hub and sat him down. Ianto leaned his head against the back of the sofa and let out a sigh that told Jack that Ianto had admitted, at least to himself, that perhaps that walk had been pushing it.

Jack sat next to him, rubbing his hand gently up and down Ianto’s thigh, just staying with him, letting him rest.

By the time Owen came in with their bags, Ianto’s eyes had drifted closed and Jack had tilted him against his shoulder.

“He okay?” Owen asked dropping the bags and moving over to grab Ianto’s hand and take his pulse.

“If you two are going to have a panic attack every time I get tired, you might as well just take me to the nearest hospital now,” Ianto complained without opening his eyes.

“I’m not panicking,” Jack told him confidently.

“Neither am I,” Owen followed. “But that was a long walk for you at this point.”

“I figured that out,” Ianto admitted.

Owen squeezed his arm and then went back to the things he’d left by the door. He grabbed the pillows and came back. “Here, why don’t you just lay down here for a bit while I write down some instructions for Captain Jack here.”

Jack carefully laid Ianto against the pillows and loosened his windbreaker and took off his shoes. Ianto was asleep within seconds of being horizontal.

“He’s still got a ton of drugs in his system, and that was a long walk for someone in his condition. I’m not worried,” he said to Jack’s concerned look.

Jack just nodded and followed Owen to his computer station. The girls had obviously been in, the computers all rebooted and everything cleaned up. Owen pulled up a blank document. “Okay, you ready for all this?” He glanced over to see Jack nod. It wasn’t anything they hadn’t discussed in London, but in more general terms. Now Jack was about to be inundated with a thousand little details.

“Meds schedule,” Owen said as he started typing, explaining as he went about typing in the whats and how muches and how oftens, which ones were to be taken strictly on schedule and which could be used as needed. “And by ‘as needed’, I mean based on your judgment, not his. Not yet. He doesn’t seem to think he needs any meds ever. We know better.” He typed a few more instructions. “Physio. Though we may want to leave off for the rest of today. Even though he was asleep, I think that car trip really took it out of him.” He pulled a note out of his pocket from William and copied the directions. “I’m going to call around and set him up appointments with someone who can help him with the balance and vision stuff,” he added as he hit save and print. “We could still be looking at a couple weeks or months before his eyes sort out.” Owen explained.

Jack noticed that he left the ‘if ever’ unsaid. It was still a crap-shoot as to whether or not Ianto would get full control over the muscles in his eyes. It was causing problems at this point because he couldn’t move his eyes to the side and moving his head with any kind of speed was still painful. When his mood took a downward turn, he could get quite cross about it. After a few failed attempts to read books, Jack had finally found him a few audio books and put them on an iPod so at least he wasn’t also bitching about being bored. And then there were the times Jack had finally learned to drop the platitudes and just let Ianto rant himself out.

“The other stuff is pretty self-explanatory,” Owen carried on. “He’s still nauseous, so we need to keep him hydrated and watch his electrolytes. I’m going to pick up a case of sport drinks for him. He says they’re rubbish, but they aren’t that bad. Make him drink them.”

Jack laughed. “This is the guy who doesn’t drink soda or beer. The fact that he doesn’t like Lucozade doesn’t surprise me.”

Owen made a face. “No soda, no beer? What does he live on?”

Jack smiled, “Water and coffee, I guess. He was drinking apple juice in the hospital.”

“That’s not too bad. At least it has a good amount of sugar in it. I’ll get some of that too, but try to get him to drink the electrolyte stuff.” Owen grabbed the papers off the printer and handed them to Jack. “I know I’m in your speed dial, but my numbers are on the bottom of the papers just in case. If he starts acting off at all –“

“I know, I know,” Jack agreed. It was heartening to see how worried Owen was. Just before he’d left Ianto had shot Owen. It was nice to know they’d worked through that little incident.

“We never hated each other, Jack,” Owen said, reading Jack’s face. “We just had very strong but opposing views on a few things. We sorted that out not long after you left.”

Jack raised an eyebrow.

“Not like that!” Owen snatched the papers back and smacked Jack with them. “That may be your way of settling differences with people, but we used words. You know… we talked.”

Jack smiled. “I’m glad. I’m really glad you were there when he fell. I can’t imagine he would have survived up there without trained medical help. Good job.”

Owen shrugged, not used to Jack complimenting him. “Why don’t you see if you can get him into bed. He’s going to be sleeping off that compazine most of the day. I dosed him but good. I’m going to the chemist’s and Tescos. Be back to check on him in a bit.”

Jack nodded and smiled and stuck the directions in his pocket as he turned and went back up to Ianto. He knelt next to the couch and shook Ianto’s shoulder gently. “Ianto? Hey, Ianto, wake up for a bit. Let’s get you downstairs into bed.”

Ianto rolled his head to look at Jack and let out a groan. “Did you seriously just wake me up to tell me to go to sleep?”

Jack gave him a wicked grin. “Yeah, I guess I did. Come on.” He took Ianto’s hand and helped him into a sitting position. “Owen’s gone off to get the rest of your meds and some food and stuff to keep here. Somehow he doesn’t think a regular diet of pizza and egg rolls is going to do much for your recovery.

Ianto just glared, but he didn’t object when Jack stood and then helped him stand as well.

They made their way slowly to Jack’s office where Ianto looked at the hole in the floor like it was a hole in the rift about to swallow him.

Jack pointed to the floor. “Sit.”

“Jack I can – “

“Sit,” Jack ordered again, helping Ianto to lower himself down and hang his feet through the hole.

Wisely, Ianto complied. He knew that there would be times later – when he actually felt better than he did at that particular moment – when he’d have to battle Jack for his independence. This one wasn’t worth it.

Jack scampered down the ladder and then moved around to help Ianto navigate the few steps and then he led him to the bed. There they found a large box sitting on the covers.

There was a note with Jack’s name on it and a card with Ianto’s taped to the top. Jack handed over the card and then took the note for him.

“Jack, we came down and changed the sheets and put clean towels in the bathroom. I can’t believe you expected someone to convalesce without a telly. Call if you need anything. Tosh and Gwen,” Jack read aloud.

Ianto was moving the card nearer and farther as he tried to focus on it. Eventually he just closed one eye – a coping mechanism Jack was getting more and more used to seeing – and read, “It has a DVD player built in. I’ll bring some movies from home when you feel up to watching something. Get better soon. Jack’s coffee is rubbish, Gwen and Tosh.” Ianto read, his head turning back and forth as he scanned the lines. Ianto looked up with a grin. “I think it’s entirely possible that I wasn’t supposed to read that last bit out loud.”

“Well, then, she can make the coffee until you feel like coming back up,” Jack said primly.

“Well, Owen and Tosh will thank you for that punishment, at least,” Ianto said with a lopsided grin.

“Smartass,” Jack said taking the small TV/DVD player and setting it on his desk. “We’ll set it up later.”

Ianto nodded, scooting around to lean against the wall, his head going back with a thud that Jack sharply disapproved of. “Don’t say a word, Jack,” Ianto mumbled, eyes still closed. “Yes that did hurt, I don’t plan on doing it again.”

Jack’s face softened, not that Ianto was looking. “Let’s get you out of those jeans and into bed,” he said, leaving the head-thumping alone.

“Okay,” Ianto agreed aloud, having learned that nodding and shaking his head still didn’t end up well for him. He was drifting off though, so Jack simply manhandled him until he’d gotten him out of his jeans and windbreaker. Jack got him to slide down and lay back against the pillow while he unbuttoned the dark blue oxford and pulled it off him. “You want to keep your t-shirt on?” Jack asked as Ianto settled against the pillow, clearly at the end of his current bout of consciousness.

“Whatever, Jack, I just want to go to sleep,” Ianto muttered as he wrapped his arms around the end of his pillow.

Jack decided that it was easier to just leave it on than try and wrestle it over his head at that point. He ignored how badly he wanted to strip down to his own boxers and snuggle up to Ianto skin-to-skin and wiggled the blanket and sheet out from under Ianto and then draped them over him. “You want company?” he asked sitting on the edge of the bed and gently stroking Ianto’s shoulder.

There was a long pause that made Jack think that perhaps Ianto was already too far asleep to hear him. But then there was a deep breath and a very quiet, “I’ve been waiting weeks for you to ask me that.”

“Give me just a minute,” Jack said brightly with a kiss to Ianto’s ear as he bounced up. He stripped off his own clothes – his elastic braces snapping his hand as he nearly tripped himself trying to get himself undressed as fast as he could. Once he’d gotten himself down to his skivvies and the lights turned out, he carefully slid between the sheets and wrapped himself around Ianto’s body. He slid one arm carefully under Ianto’s neck and settled his face in the space between Ianto’s shoulder and his ear. “This okay?”

Ianto threaded his fingers between Jack’s where Jack’s hand rested on his belly. “Absolutely.”

“I’m sorry you got hurt,” Jack whispered into Ianto’s warm skin.

“Wasn’t your fault,” Ianto muttered, squeezing Jack’s hand.

“I’m not sure of that,” Jack said still trying to trace back timelines that happened and events that didn’t. He couldn’t help but feel that there had been a spiral of events that he’d caused that directly led to Ianto’s injury. If he hadn’t thrown himself at the TARDIS it wouldn’t have gone to the end of the universe. If they hadn’t gone to the end of the universe, “Dr. Yana” would never have been alerted to his true nature. If “Dr. Yana” hadn’t become The Master again –

“Jack stop!” Ianto barked, his words slurred with sleep.

Jack immediately took inventory of his hands and feet to try and figure out what Ianto would be objecting too.

“I can hear the wheels turning. I don’t blame you,” Ianto said forcing some clarity into his voice. “Now go to sleep, okay?”

“Psychic training?” Jack asked quietly.

“No, I just know you Jack. You blamed yourself for Brecon Beacons, you blamed yourself for Rhys dying before we opened the rift, you blame yourself for everything bad that happens to us. Whether you were directly involved or not. I fell. Shit happens. But that doesn’t make it your fault.” Ianto was breathing heavily after his scolding.

Jack hugged him tight, “Sorry.” He stroked the peach fuzz on the back of Ianto’s head. “I brood, you know that.”

“Let it go for now, okay?” Ianto shifted onto his back, still unable to lay on the other side that would let him face Jack completely. “We’re all home. We’re all okay,” he made a face at the face Jack made at him implying that he was okay, “Let’s take a little while to just be glad we’re both back home.”

Jack nodded and leaned in to kiss him deeply. “I can do that,” Jack promised. He flopped onto his back and encouraged Ianto to roll onto his stomach so he could rest the good side of his head on Jack’s shoulder. Once Ianto settled Jack adjusted the blankets.

“Owen will be back in a while with your meds. Sleep until then,” Jack said lifting his head to kiss Ianto’s temple.

“Bugger Owen and his meds,” Ianto mumbled into Jack’s chest.

“You better not,” Jack said. The last thing he heard before they both drifted off was Ianto’s quiet laugh.
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Date: 2007-11-09 11:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mistressslash.livejournal.com
Fantastic!!! But, please - tell me there will be more? Does he get better without killing Jack or Owen? :)

This has been a lovely fic. I've adored it!!!

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] smallwaldo.livejournal.com
Um, short version? "Yeah, eventually." :) And killing Jack could be therapudic since it wouldn't stick, no? :) I had to end somewhere. As a veteran of head trauma (who me project my own incident with a bicycle and curb issues onto my characters? Never! :) Anyway, head trauma can take months to clear up when it's bad enough... and the 'short story' I was doing while I worked on the longer thing was already over 10,000 words. So I had to end it somewhere. :)

So glad you liked it. I have fun whumping on poor woobie characters. :)

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] asrai99.livejournal.com
I loved this! I really did, it's a well-done h/c fic and I'm a sucker for those! Yay, thank you for posting this!

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Eee! Thanks. I do like doing the h/c thing. I'm not sure if that makes me some kind of projecting masochist (or sadist) or something, but some characters just need to be whalloped on. :)

Glad you enjoyed it. :)

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] likestowrite.livejournal.com
Beautiful ending; very elegant (despite Ianto banging his head on the wall). Love Your line about letting Ianto rant himself out; because i love to rant.
I adore this, sad its ended but its a great fic; much love for it.

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
He didn't have the best motor control back yet. :) And one of the things about head trauma is that people tend to speak their mind a little more freely when they're tired and cranky and full of brain-damage. I figure that would really mess with someone as buttoned-up as Ianto. :)

And yes, this one is over, but there is another monster in the works.

So glad you enjoyed this. :)

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hellenebright.livejournal.com
Lovely ending ... but surely there's more *pleading grin*

Well plotted, well executed, and the medicobabble sounded convincing, which is really all it has to do...:)

Lovely work.

Odd Brit-ism: in the US of A, I understand 'skivvies' are gents undercrackers. In the UK, a 'skivvy' is a maid of all work.</small?

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Date: 2007-11-09 11:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
There's not more to *this* particular story, but there are more stories. The plot bunnies have gotten vicious. And most of the medicobabble in this part... uh... cribbed from personal history. :)

Glad you liked the story.

As for the Britishism... Jack gives me fits. He uses an American accent, but he's apparently been in the UK since *at least* 1941, but sometimes he uses more American jargon and sometimes he uses British. It makes writing the exposition hell. :) But thanks for letting me know that. It's good to have it in the back of my mind for next time.

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Date: 2007-11-10 12:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shara50.livejournal.com
This hole story was absolutely fantastic and romantic.

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Date: 2007-11-10 12:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Aw thanks! Romantic, huh? Cool. :) Color me amazed that the whole thing came out to over 10,000 words. I so didn't anticipate that when I started. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 12:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sarcasticchick.livejournal.com
very, very lovely h/c.

guh, i am so a sucker for 'em.

nice job on the med stuff too - i was going to say you've either had experience or are a nurse/doctor. :)

i love the jack returns fics anywho, and then you go and top it off with some woobie!ianto and ... *purrs*

very nicely done.

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Thank you. :) I'm a sucker for them too.

And I'm glad the med stuff worked for you. I'm so *not* in the medical profession. But uh... four concussions between the ages of 6 and 11 and parents who don't let you forget ANYTHING you EVER say under ANY circumstances... :)

AnyWHO? :) :) :) I'm really curious to see how the show will handle this, but in the meantimes it is great fic fodder. :)

So glad you liked the fic.

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fairyd123.livejournal.com
Aw lovely and very sweet story!

If you don't mind a couple of tiny Brit picks - it would be more likely for Owen to be trying to ply Ianto with Lucozade rather than Powerade - they're the same sort of thing (glucose drinks) but Lucozade tends to be the drink of choice to pep you up when you get sick over here!

Also when I see "soda" I tend to think of soda water - I guess "fizzy drinks"or just the name of the brand might have been better.

But yeah I get your point that it's quite difficult to know quite how to write Jack as he is neither American or British and the accent is just completely incidental to his characterisation- very tricky one!

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
A.) Thank you for the hints. I really do appreciate them.
B.) I asked around my f'list for the Gatorade equivalents and no one seemed to know them! *headdesk* The Powerade thing was as close as I could get. Thanks though. Good to have for next time.
C.) That's a Chicago-ism thing... my bad. :)

But, yeah, Jack makes my life so difficult. ;) "Jack" has an American accent, but JB is actually a Scottish transplant to America so he freely uses both sets of idiom and... yeah, guh. (In fact I'm *still* trying to find out which grade school he went to in Aurora, IL, because there's a 1/6 chance that if he went to public schools there... we would have could have passed each other in the halls! Which tends to Americanize both him and "Jack" in my head a lot.)

All that said, I'm glad you liked the story. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:30 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] obelix
Love this story :-)

Just the right amount of hurt with comfort without schmoop!

I love your Torchwood writings.

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Hey you! Glad you like the stories. I always worry if I'm going overboard on the lovie-dovey stuff. So glad I seem to be finding the balance. Thanks so much for the nice note! :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] erin-giles.livejournal.com
Yay for hurt/comfort! *snuggles under the blanket with Jack and Ianto* Loved this story to bits! So much so I might have to go and read it again... :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 01:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Aw... *joins you and ends up making a big puppy pile on the bed*

Hope it holds up to a second reading. Glad you liked it so much to give it a second go. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfspokenwords.livejournal.com
Awww. *snuggles Jack and Ianto* This is really sweet. And not overly lovey-dovey at all! I like caring!Jack and headtrauma!Ianto. I also like getting to see Owen being a proper doctor.

I really enjoyed these three. Hope to be seeing more soon!

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
I want to think that Owen isn't normally as big of an ass as he was in the last half of the season. Over the course of the year he and Ianto really went through the most. Ianto internalizes. Owen... externalizes all over everyone. But I'd like to think that he's not a complete moron. Professionally or personally.

Glad you liked the story. :) And, yeah, there will be more. I'm working on a doozey of a piece now. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] estarcollector.livejournal.com
I have one word for this fic: YAY! Hate that it's over, but can't wait to see more from you.

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Aw... thanks! There will be more... the bunnies they are rapidly procreating. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 03:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darthhellokitty.livejournal.com
I really love this - as someone else said, h/c without excess schmoop! It all seems very much in character.

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Your icon For The WIN! That's just awesome.

Glad you liked the story. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 03:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kensieg.livejournal.com
Looks good!

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Hee! Thanks. And thanks for all the help. BTW... that thing you want from me... it's become a small monster. Certain characters have an instant dislike for each other and poor Jack's caught in the middle and it's all very angsty and complicated. O_o

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Date: 2007-11-10 07:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fatchickengirl.livejournal.com
Bless! A sequel about Ianto's recovery?

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
I never say never, but I will say probably not. I have other things in the works that are taking over much of the bunny hutch. :) But I'm glad you liked it! :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 07:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dr-is-in.livejournal.com
Again, a wonderful story......I really like the connection between Jack and Ianto in this.

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Aw... thanks. Again. :)

I love my woobie men being all woobie!men. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 08:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mrs-cj-harkness.livejournal.com
:O *gobsmacked* this cannot be it?
I...it...twas brilliant from Jack's angsty thoughts to an "awww" moment @ the end. :D x

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Gobsmacked? Cool! :) Thanks!

But yes, this is it for this particular story. I need to get back to the larger monster that this somewhat smaller monster interrupted so very rudely. I just wanted to take a few minutes to try something different than all the really explosive OMG!Jack'sHome! stories. Not that a lot of them aren't really good, but I wanted to see what people thought of it being handled a different way.

And now I'm back to my regularly scheduled brand of insanity. :) But color me happy that this worked for you.

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Date: 2007-11-10 09:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hazelayes.livejournal.com
I concur with all the nice things people have said about this story :D It was excellent. I don't think a continuation is necessary though. It is what it is and it's finished. Now another story, one that takes up that 'psy-connection' aspect you began there for a moment, THAT would be good, eh? *hint, hint*

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Thanks. One of the things I've struggled with throughout my embarrassingly long fic writing career is where to end stories. I could go on and on through the roughly three months of Ianto's recovery (as I see it), but seriously, I've made my point now I need to get out.

I wrote this while I was writing something else (because certain bunnies don't understand 'wait the hell in line!'), but it also gave me a chance to see how people reacted to the idea that Ianto would have had psychic training and, as I see it, would have been amongst the more 'gifted' in that area. It'll come in handy in the thing that this interrupted. :)

So, thank you very much. Now off to poke at the *first* thing. :)

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Date: 2007-11-10 11:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] carma-chaos.livejournal.com
Fabulous story, protrayed well which is always great to see.

I noticed a few comments about Brit-picking and the main thing I can see is that Powerade is available here but Lucozade is more common. Plus, Powerade is disgusting.
As for the skivvies, that depends on where in the Uk you are. Also, a skivy is a maid but a pair of skivvies is men's underwear where I come from - which is North East England. So really, it was neither an Americanism or a Britishism, it's more of a coloquial thing. That's the trouble nowadays, some places within a country use a word used in another country but have been using it all along so therefore the difference between Britishism and Americanisms is blurred. Plus, Jack is just a really hard character to write for that. That's more to do with writers of the show though and I'm not opening that can of worms or I'll be here all day!

Anyway, as I said, fab fic, I can't wait to see more.

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Date: 2007-11-10 02:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
I'm seriously thinking at this point that since it's just a one word fix that doesn't alter *anything* else, I'm going to go in and fix the Lucozade thing. Thanks.

And yes, not that I project onto my characters, but sports drinks are *vile*, slimy, nasty things. I hate them with a passion.

And yeah, Jack being the worst British-American ever... so hard to write around the way he speaks. :) Part of me says, "Well, I can't be wrong, he very well could say..." And the rest of me goes, "I'll never be right because he's so damn contrary!" :)

Though in "Exercise in Frustration" I had the go 'round with Ianto's speech. I had him saying something about the t.v. My beta pointed out that he'd probably say 'telly', which normally I'd agree with. But in OoT, he talks about the chick in her bra on the magazine cover as a "children's t.v. presenter" so... *shrug*. I think the internet and t.v./telly are causing our various idioms to crash into each other with very messy results. :)

Glad you enjoyed the story though. :)

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Date: 2007-11-11 09:09 am (UTC)
From: [personal profile] jo02
I am sad that this one is over, but I like the sound of "there's another monster one in the works". That is music to my ears.

And you can never get enough H/C, especially when, like with yours, it is never served with a big side order of mush, and the characters stay wonderfully, in character.

And what I especially liked was your interpretation of Owen - there was no whinger!Owen here (which I think might make this story non-canon, lol - just joking). I loved how you had him taking charge in the beginning of this story, like a man for a change. And I liked that you had Gwen and Tosh looking to him rather than Jack, which is EXACTLY what would happen. Wonderful, wonderful handling.

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Date: 2007-11-11 02:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Thanks so much for all the kind words!

And yeah, I'm really trying to believe that Owen just had a really crappy few weeks there at the end of the season and that he's really *not* that big of an ass normally. But he's an externalizer whereas Ianto's an internalizer. So it looks like Ianto 'got over' Lisa (and the cannibals and whatever else) and moved on, Owen looks like a whiny arse because he bitches out loud. But I think that something significant like losing Jack would get him to re-focus. And in the wake of losing Suzie (9 or 12 times) I think Owen would be second in command. So... yeah.

Glad it worked for you. I'm hoping season 2 will mellow Owen a little more. I started off liking him, then I didn't so much. I'd like to start liking him again.

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Date: 2007-11-11 03:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] blaidd-drwg10.livejournal.com
awwww nice ending!! yup Ianto is stubborn and needs a boss sometimes!!

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Date: 2007-11-11 03:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] smallwaldo.livejournal.com
Guh... now you have me wanting to write a *whole* different kind of story. ;)

Glad you liked it. :)

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Date: 2007-11-11 05:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ravynbryce.livejournal.com
Lovely, sad to see it end! A good read. Will go back lately and re-read all 3 sections together. Looking forward to reading more in the future. :)

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Date: 2007-11-11 05:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Thanks! I'm sorting out an issue in my next story right now so I can get back to actually writing it. So yeah, something else soonish. :)

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Date: 2007-11-11 10:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thedreamer-geo.livejournal.com
Loved every bit of this :)

Brilliant-o.

Will there be more? 'twas very good.

Did I mention I liked it?

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Date: 2007-11-11 11:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Okay, now I'm singing Simon and Garfunkle. "When we marched down to Finari-o..." Hm, could very well be dating myself with that comment. Just as well, no one else will date me. :)

Anyway, yes, you mentioned that. So glad!

There's no more of *this* story, but as we speak, I'm on page 20 of something else. ;)



*headdesk* Just noticed your icon. Just got the joke. I am *so* damn slow some days. :)

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Date: 2007-12-18 02:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katiebugs18.livejournal.com
Oh my gods, I just found your writing and I'm so beyond glad that I did because this is so wonderful.

I'm off to read everything else you've written but I couldn't leave without telling you how wonderful this is.

Thanks bunches. :-)

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Date: 2007-12-18 02:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Oh my, thank you. :) If you go to the top of my [livejournal.com profile] smallwaldo journal, there's a list of links to all my writing. There's like 5 pieces at the top in the "current" section and then everything else is in there alphabetically by fandom.

Have fun! (and give yourself a little time when you get to PTSD... it's a monster. :)

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Date: 2008-01-11 11:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mukhy0.livejournal.com
I know I'm late, but I just wanted to say I loved this story. Your attention to detail is fantastic and I love how you wrote Ianto and his mannerisms. He really does seem like the type to worry about everyone else despite being the one in the hospital bed. I loved his lines in the story, but most of all, I really loved your Owen! It's nice to read about him in his doctor role. I like seeing him like this much more than the mess he turned into at the end of Season 1 :) Great characterization!

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Date: 2008-01-12 02:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thefannishwaldo.livejournal.com
Never, ever worry about being late! I don't know of anything an author likes more than getting feedback on a story that's been sitting on the shelf for a while. It's *awesome*!

I'm so glad you liked this piece. It was one of my early forays into the fandom and I feel like I was still getting a grip on the characters. I think Owen is a jerk, but he's not *quite* the masoginist the show made him out to be at the end of the season. I'm really hoping we see him in a more redeeming light this year, now that he's had some distance from the whole Diane thing and the whole time period Jack was gone. I'm hoping anyway! :)

So pleased you liked this so much. :)

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Date: 2008-02-07 08:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-dolor.livejournal.com
Sweet story!

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Date: 2008-02-07 08:58 pm (UTC)
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